Story

The bank robbery

One hot day Jordan and I went to the ice-cream shop to buy some ice-cream. We both bought a scoop each. I took my effpos out to pay for it, but the cashier said nicely “sorry we don’t take effpos.” So we went to the bank to get some cash out of my card.

We walked to the desk, but there was no one there. We rang the little bell, but still there no one to be seen or herd. “That’s odd,” I said. “Don’t you feel something weird going around here?” said Jordan. All of a sudden we saw to quiet robbers sneaking in from the air vent. We quickly went under the desk. We peeked through. They were too big to take down. So Jordan took her cell phone out and texted her mum who was a cop.

A couple of minutes later we heard a siren. The sound got louder and louder then it stopped. We saw three cops running in with Jordan’s mum with a small gun in her hand. The three cops hand cuffed the robbers and pushed into the police car. Jordan’s mum gave us a big hug and said “thanks guys.” Then she went in the car and waved.

Finally we went back to the ice-cream store, and went back home with a big scoop of ice-cream each. By Esther Kim

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